Master Class: Tuesday
31 08 2010The agile angel stood with arms akimbo and listened to the affidavit.
Rewrite this sentence replacing the words in bold. Feel free to rearrange the sentence. Your sentence should positively sing.
Red Space Rocket
Mr O'Meara @ Western Heights College
The angel, who, in typical fashion, had swiftly entered the court, stood with her hands on her hips as the lawyer read his client’s troth.
Mostly excellent. Not 100 percent about troth working in this sentence. Otherwise, however, it is terrific.
I wasn’t entirely sure about troth either, but I decided that I’d give it a go.
The nimble angel stood with arms crossed and listened to the official declaration.
Good work, Ana. A good, clear sentence.