Your task is to improve this piece. Here are some things you should concentrate on.
Capital letters and spelling. Make sure this is all correct. It makes it easier to read.
Adjectives and descriptions.
Verbs and adverbs. Paint the picture with words
Change the names. You can get quite a different tone by just changing the names of characters.
Adding direct speech. Hearing people speak can bring new life to a story.
Putting in paragraph breaks to improve the flow.
Making sentences either shorter or longer. Read it to yourself and listen for where you think each bit should go.
Adding more detail when it will make it more interesting.
Taking out detail, take away the boring and pointless bits.
For example you might start with this.
On Friday fred and bob left home looking for adventure.
and turn it into this.
It was the sort of Friday where anything seemed like anything in the world could happen but nothing at all was happening. It was the sort of bright, sunny and dull afternoon that made Antonio and Rupert just want to do something really stupid. Or maybe really smart. Just something.
I suggest that you copy this text into Microsoft Word, work on it there and then paste in back into the Wiki when you are finished.
Anyhow here is your starting text.
It was Friday and bob and andy were bored and really wanted something to happen. So they got into the car and drove and after a while they stopped and got something to eat and then they got back into the car again and drove some more until it started to get dark. when it got dark andy said they should pull over and find somewhere to stop but bob wasn’t really sure. they talked about this for a long time. In the end they drove a bit more and finally decided to just sleep in the car.
There was fog the next morning and Andy couldn’t see much but he wanted a little privacy from the road so he walked away from the car for a while. He felt a bit lost as he walked back to the car. He felt really lost when he couldn’t find it at all. All he found was a frog and it looked a bit like bob.
Andy and Frog Bob started walking back towards the last town and andy wasnt sure how far it was. he could have asked Bob but bob was either gone or turned into this frog. Either way he was not being helpful so they just keep on walking. Then he did ask him and the frog just made a sound which made no sense so he didn’t ask Bob any more questions.
In town he saw the car just sitting there and it was still going. As he walked towards it andy had to wait for a car to go past and just as he was going to cross another car went past and then as he was going to cross another one went past which seemed strange in such a quiet town. He got into the car everything seemed fine. He put the fog onto the seat and drove away. He was doing to need a doctor and maybe the police.
If you finished improving this section (and there is plenty of room for improvement) then you might like to write a little more or perhaps an ending. But that’s only for an extension for when you finish improving this piece.